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I enjoyed this work and look forward to reading more from you in the future.

I enjoyed "Supergirl vs. The Mob." That's where I got the idea of kryptonite-loaded guns. Good artists copy. Great artists...are humble enough to admit that they have used someone else's idea. Picasso said that.

You need to proof read it a bit. And there's not much point in 'a surprise entrance by Batgirl' when you tell us about it in your pre-amble

I didn't think it would be a surprise...

Thanks for the comment about proofreading. I'm trying a new writing app on my phone and it must make more error prone. If I post another story I'll go over it more carefully.

Just edit this one. For example did you know you had 'a clicking NOSE' in the second paragraph? It's hilarious but does detract somewhat. We have all done it (I had the terrible COAT of World War 1 instead of COST in a piece I' d written). I'll post a comment on the story once I've finished it.
I think humility is a good trait in writers though, never a good move to big up your own work at the beginning as it sets you up for a fall.

Nice job, well written with a few surprises that kept it interesting. Good work.

Very nice story!