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It occurred to me that this story would make a pretty good video. It wouldn't be difficult to rewrite it with just Andrea, Abby and the mummy. Start with an external stock image of a spooky house. Cut to an interior as the girls enter, soaking wet. They explain who they are, how their car broke down...

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Amazing story!

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Centurion, outstanding job! And I have to say, Abby-Isis, what a great twist! One of the best triggers for me is to have a super heroine's super power stolen. Abby-Isis hits that perfectly! I actually hope it is NOT the end. To read more of Isis trying to regain her power from Abby-Isis holds much ...

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Very nice story and you finished it in time for Halloween after all. What dedication! :thumbup: ... Seems overdone to me unless there's something specific about Abby? Otherwise, a delightful Halloween treat. Thanks, Centurian. I definitely see the justice in this remark in hindsight. I pictured And...

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Well, I managed to get in under the wire after all! Chapter 5 -- "Urrrhh!" the mummy groaned, thrusting forward with its heavy spear. Isis only barely managed to evade it, twisting gracefully to one side, her tiny skirt flying around her thighs. Rebounding from the wall, the lean young sup...

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Thank you for all the nice comments. I want to apologize a little if the story seems not as polished as my work usually is. The truth is I just thought up the idea last week, and I've been writing it sort of "on the fly" during my lunch hours, hoping to get it finished in time for Hallowee...

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"Oh My Queen," said the royal sorceror to Hatshepset, "with this amulet you will be endowed with the powers of the goddess Isis. You will soar as the falcon soars, run with the speed of gazelles, and command the elements of earth and sky." Centuries later, school teacher Andrea ...

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DrDominator9 wrote:Superb story! I had thought that Ishtar was somehow helping to funnel power to the Fox's bracelets when they first failed but I guess not, huh?

She certainly could have been. But she was mainly focused on explaining why she couldn't personally intervene.

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Epilogue-- Three days later-- "And we're back on Good Morning Washington. I'm Keri Keller." The redhead was wearing a short, pale green dress. "Our special guest has been the one and only Fuchsia Fox. Fox, any last comments as we say good-bye?" The young superheroine, sitting sli...

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Chapter 6 -- In the middle of the six o'clock news, a story on a new recycling program was cut short and returned to the studio, where an inset screen over Keri Keller's left shoulder bore the title: "Fuchsia Fox Captured by ORCUS?" "Following our lead story tonight," said the be...

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Chapter 5 -- In the Communications Center of the Chamberlain , Martin Fletcher felt as if someone had just kicked him in the balls. Two of the Hedgetrimmer drones had been shot down during the diversionary attack. The other four having expelled all their minirockets, he had pulled them back, keeping...

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bobcashman wrote:Can hardly wait for what comes next. Very, very entertaining!

Thanks Bob. It gets better!

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Sounds like "Heroine Transformations" to me.

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Sounds like "Heroine Transformations" to me.

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[I'm only going to post chapter 4 today. Look for chapter 5 Monday or Tuesday, and the 6th and final chapter probably next Thursday or Friday.] Chapter 4 -- Manticore got to his feet, glaring at the Fuchsia Fox as if he wanted to rip her head off. But he was interrupted in this ambition by the incon...

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All I can say is: WOW!!!!

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You're too kind. Flirty too of course. I realize that chapters two and three weren't exactly balls of fire, but the next installment will be, when the Fox goes up against Manticore with all of America watching! I'm having some technical difficulties today, but I plan to post it Thursday or Friday.

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[Quick disclaimer here -- although I can't deny that the story was inspired by certain real events, it is fiction. The ORCUS terrorist group is not intended to represent any real-life terrorist group you may have heard about in the news.] Chapter 2 -- Once their statements had been taken, Jennifer t...

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I love the twists and turns in this story! Good work!

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Fuchsia Fox: "Arena of Doom" Prologue -- Washington D.C. Keri Keller bustled through the Channel 3 television news room, glancing up at the wall clock. Less than five minutes to 3 p.m. The beautiful redhead hurried into the studio, smoothing her lavender silk blouse and checking her hair a...

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Very well done! (I liked the Julie Newmar Catwoman better than Lee Meriwether but this is no time to quibble over details.)

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That's not how I remember either the tv show or the comics. The bracelets only appear after she changes in the flash of light that brings her costume and tiara and lasso from storage in another dimension. That's a very good point. It's a well-established part of the Wonder Woman mythos that she can...

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I'm curious how you'll be able to get around FF's identity problem with her bracelets fused to her now, or if she'll just be a superheroine 24/7 and let Martin be the breadwinner in a one-income family now that they're married. I'm sorry I didn't make that clear. She'll still have the secret identi...

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Centurion, all in all, I love it! And I like that her bracelets seem to have mysteriously become more permanent. This should make for a rather exciting future confrontation with her bracelets being seized up on for removal. Can't wait! Ah yes! I do intend to explain why it happened in an upcoming s...

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Another winning submission, Centurian. :thumbup: Just one thought though: Even with the missile exploding wouldn't the payload of deadly toxin be sprayed all over the people-filled mall below. Is our government now filled with Zombies? Seems likely. :lol: Yeah, I get what you're saying. The missile...

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Appreciate it, Digitalbleh. Just in time for the grand finale. *** Chapter 7 -- How fast was a cruise missile anyway? As the Fuchsia Fox soared into the sky in pursuit, the thing was already a distant star on the evening horizon. She poured on the speed -- eighty, ninety, a hundred miles an hour, an...

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Chapter 5 -- "NO! NOOOO!" the dark-haired girl begged, thrashing back and forth in her chains like an animal in a trap as the white mist engulfed both her and the Fuchsia Fox. Wrinkling her pert little nose as though from a horrible stench, Blackbird began to flail her head from side to si...

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Centurion, excellent first two installments! In the first part where she had gotten dressed without putting on her Fox outfit, just the bracelets, I have to admit I was very excited at the prospect of the Fox having to do battle, supercharged, but without her regular uniform! The idea of her being ...

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Excellent second act. Particularly enjoyed the fight and the OTS scenes. I appreciate it. I do enjoy a good Over The Shoulder carry. The drawback to my style of storytelling -- i.e., mostly heroine POV -- is that she's usually unconscious when she's carried that way and isn't aware of it. This was ...

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krispin21 wrote:I think I was.

Thanks, great work!

Yes, I do believe you were the one. All this time I kept it in mind, and I was just looking for the right opportunity. Hopefully you'll like the next two chapters, too.

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Chapter 3 -- Together Blackbird and the Fuchsia Fox flew over Maryland, across Chesapeake Bay, and into Delaware. After nearly an hour, Jennifer began to wish that she could ask her companion how much further it was going to be, but at the pace the dark-clad girl was setting, it was impossible to ca...

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[Some time back, I got a PM asking for more girl-on-girl wrestling in my stories. I begged off at the time because personally I don't think I'm good at that kind of thing. I have lots of female villains, but I generally prefer the rough physical stuff done with a male attacker. In this story there's...

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I had this really silly idea the other day. It strikes me as good comedy material, but I doubt if I'll write it, so somebody else might be able to make something of it. It might even make a good video. I don't know; I don't really look at videos. The heroine's name is Captain Purebody or something l...

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I had this really silly idea the other day. It strikes me as good comedy material, but I doubt if I'll write it, so somebody else might be able to make something of it. It might even make a good video. I don't know; I don't really look at videos. The heroine's name is Captain Purebody or something l...

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I don't want to sound critical, because you write very well. It's just that I wouldn't call this a "story", more of a "vignette". A guy with magical seduction powers... very nice, but where's the plot? What happens next? Surely someone like Wonder Woman would be able to throw off...

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Another good episode! More perils of various kinds, various people who want to capture her or get ahold of her secrets or just unmask her for other reasons. Interesting stuff!

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The way I see it, if the antagonist succeeds, it generally means no more superheroine (one way or another), and that means I have to create a new character if I want to write another story. The reader is perfectly free to imagine what might have happened if Ishtar had been stranded there forever. I ...

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An interesting solution to how to slow down Ishtar's metabolism in the end, and a very enjoyable work. My one objection was how you seemed to fudge the difference between Ishtar's and the engineer's metabolism. As fun as the sex scene was I was thinking throughout it that really was not possible an...

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Thank you so much! It gets even more explicit in chapter 5... Chapter 5 -- Ishtar woke up with a guilty start, finding herself curled up with Riley's body entwined intimately about hers. The ebon-haired girl had told her that accelerated people had to sleep ten or eleven hours of subjective time out...

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Chapter 3 -- The twenty maidens pounced. Ishtar was overpowered in a twinkling by dozens of soft, female hands, seizing her, touching her all over. "No! Let go of me! You can't--" the beauty protested, unable to resist as some of the girls took off their own skimpy garments and used the si...

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Ishtar: In the Wink of an Eye [Thanks to Flirty's earlier suggestion, this is a solo story about Ishtar, the Fuchsia Fox's Zumerian mother. If you're a Star Trek fan, the title will give you a hint what it's about. Be warned it contains some steamy sexual content in chapters 3 and 5, but (you know m...

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Your English is still a little awkward, but I'm enjoying the story a great deal! Keep working on it!

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I hope I can live up to your confidence in me. I've got an Ishtar solo story that I wrote for Flirty; I'll probably post the first installment of that Friday. After that, as I mentioned before, I'm afraid I'm probably going to be too busy over the summer to do much writing.

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Chapter 9 -- Lady Emerald came out of her trance more slowly this time, with a smile on her face. "It worked," she sighed, feeling as if she had just had an orgasm. As she opened her green eyes, the glow in her emerald gemstone faded. The pulsating light of the crystal in her hand graduall...

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I loved it! Definitely worth the wait!

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This is an interesting plot twist. Keep up the good work!

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Your wish is my command... Chapter 7 -- "This is Cher Hernandez, Channel 23 News live," said the perky female reporter. "It's a scene of devastation here on the Vegas Strip. If you've been watching you saw earlier how a group of three courageous superheroines -- we still do not have t...

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Maybe I've gone senile but I didn't recognize my own idea! Which part was that? I quote you: "Love the idea of an attack during the nuptials, as long as the marriage is legit by the end. Maybe under some makeshift shelter in the rubble with the minister saying "You may kiss the bride but ...

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chapter 5 -- The Fuchsia Fox carried the other two heroines, each holding onto one of her lithe, slender arms, across the cityscape to Las Vegas Boulevard. Across from Caesar's Palace, directly in the path of the gigantic iron juggernaut, a city bus loaded with evacuees had run up on a massive chunk...

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Nice chapter! Good action with fun moments of enticing thrills. I look forward to how this develops. :yes: And I hope you recognized the idea you gave me! I had originally intended to space out these installments a little, since they're so long. So I was going to save installment 3 (chapters 5 and ...

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