Wonder Woman and the Hypno Trap

[VegaTaxeca]

Wonder Woman and the Hypno Trap
by Vega Taxeca

Disclaimer: The characters of Wonder Woman and Catwoman in this story are owned by DC Comics, Warner Brothers-Discovery and associated companies. This story is not meant to infringe on their copyright. There will be no monetary gain connected to writing this story.
The Wonder Woman in this story is loosely based on the recent DCEU movies, whereas Catwoman is a mixture of different influences for the character.


Wonder Woman was on patrol, when she heard the alarm. It came from a nearby jewelry store. She quickly entered it through the broken shop window. She saw light shining from the next room. Diana entered the room carefully, but then realized that for once the regular law forces had been first. In the middle of the room stood a female police officer, a redhead who looked down on a tablet computer in her hand. On hearing Diana, the police officer turned around in alarm, with one hand going for her weapon. On seeing the superheroine, the redhead immediately relaxed and greeted her.

“Wonder Woman, I am glad you are here. Unfortunately, you are too late. Catwoman escaped when she saw us, but maybe you can help us with this device.”

Wonder Woman stood straighter.

“Catwoman? Then this might be more serious than I thought. But what do you have there, officer …?”

She stepped closer to the other woman.

“Officer Manx, Ma’am. When she fled, the criminal left this tablet. It must hold important information, but I cannot decipher it. Here, have a look.”

The woman stood close to Diana’s side and held the tablet so that they could both watch the screen. Wonder Woman was for a moment distracted by the spicy perfume of the officer, but then focused her attention to the screen. At first it seemed just like colorful random patterns, but then she thought she noticed a system. The amazon concentrated hard to try to decipher the meaning from these patterns. It seemed very important to understand the message behind the system, therefore her eyes were glued to the screen. Absentmindedly, she noticed that the officer had placed her arm around Diana’s back. Somehow, she felt safe in the arm of this strong woman and therefore did not react, even when a hand landed on her behind. Wonder Woman was still busy looking at the screen, when a second police officer appeared from further back in the building.

“Catwoman is gone. But I am glad to see you, Wonder Woman. She lost something that might be of help for you.”

This second officer was a petite woman of Asian descent. Like her colleague, she was wearing sunglasses, which the unsuspecting amazon was too distracted to notice. She was still very much focused on the tablet, but also felt warmth rise in her loins from being surrounded by two beautiful women. Especially, when the newcomer stepped closer on Diana’s other side, so that she was now sandwiched between the officers. Only struggling she managed to ask about her findings.

“What did you find, officer?”

“A wireless earpiece. I think it is connected to the tablet. Let me help you.”

Without waiting for a response, she inserted the piece in Diana’s ear, yet Wonder Woman stayed passive and accepted it. The amazon got even more focused on the tablet, once she heard entrancing music from the ear piece. Soon, she felt arousal, coupled with the need to understand the messages from the tablet. For several minutes, she just stood there, listening and watching, while the two officers let their hands roam over her luscious body. Even naughty fingers playing with her nipples could not distract her from her concentration. Finally, the two police women looked at each other and decided that their prey was ready for the next step. Officer Manx pushed the tablet in Diana’s hand.

“It is time for you to go home. Make yourself comfortable and keep watching. Soon you will have an important revelation about Catwoman.”

Diana felt thrilled by the commanding tone of the statuesque police officer. It made goosebumps run along her arms. Even though she would have loved to keep watching the patterns on the tablet now, she did as she was told. With a short farewell, she turned and made her way home. On her drive back, she felt her need rise. Impatiently, she had to keep herself from watching the patterns on the tablet while she was still on the road. Finally home, she did not bother to lock her door. She shed her armor and equipment on the way to her bedroom. There she dropped naked onto the bed and picked up the tablet. She set it up so she could watch it easily. Soon, she was again immersed in the program. Over time, her feelings grew more and more sexual. Unbeknownst, those feelings were fed by subliminal messages that had been mixed into the hypnotic music and patterns. More and more her subconscious longed for sexual fulfillment and somehow, she knew that only one person could grant it to her. Two fingers were plunged into her vagina, while the other hand mauled her breasts.

A woman in an elegant suit arrived at Diana Prince’s apartment door. She was accompanied by the two police officers we met before, Manx and Siam. The woman in the lead knocked on the open door.

“Ms. Prince, this is detective Kyle, to talk about Catwoman. We come in, okay?”

“YESSS, OH YESSS!”

The detective knew very well, that this was a shout of pleasure, not an answer, but the three women entered the apartment anyway. Following the sounds of moaning, the detective walked into the bedroom, followed by the two police officers. They were greeted by the erotic sight of a naked, masturbating heroine. Wonder Woman was spread on the kings sized bed, busily pumping three fingers in her vagina, while her eyes were glued to the screen. Her armor, clothes and weapons were strewn in a single path from the door to the bed. Detective Kyle smiled.

“Seems you have been a very busy girl, Wonder Woman.”

She strolled closer and picked up the Lasso of Hestia. Casually, she crossed the last few feet and bound one end of the lasso as a leash around Diana’s neck. Admiring the view, she looked at her prey.

“You have watched dutifully, because you want to find Catwoman, haven’t you?”

“Yes, I need to find her.”

The detective smiled knowingly.

“What will you do, once you have found Catwoman?”

Even in this situation did the amazon not stop to fingering herself. Breathlessly, she answered.

“I will beg her to fuck me!”

The detective’s smile grew wider.

“You want to submit to her, don’t you?”

“Yes.”

Kyle’s tone became more commanding.

“Say it!”

Not realizing, that the trap was closing around her, Wonder Woman shouted her surrender.

“I want to submit to Catwoman! I want to be her sex slave!”

The detective’s voice was now triumphant.

“Today is your lucky day.”

She handed her end of the lasso to officer Siam and then began to strip. Soon it was revealed that below her clothes she wore the catsuit. She was Catwoman! Wonder Woman’s eyes though were now focused on the huge strap-on dildo that the arch criminal was wearing around her hips. The amazon dropped from the bed and knelt before the other woman.

“Oh, yes. Please fuck me, Catwoman! I crave to be filled.”

“From now on, that is ‘Mistress’ for you. First you will kiss my boots to submit to your new owner.”

Without any hesitation, Wonder Woman, one of the world’s most famous superheroines, bent down and pressed her lips to the tip of Catwoman’s left boot, followed by a loving kiss to the other one. With her head still bowed, she addressed the arch villainess reverently.

“I am yours, Mistress.”

“Yes, slave. Your mind, your body and your soul are mine. From now on, you exist solely to please me. I command. You obey.”

“Yes, Mistress.”

Enforced by the Lasso of Hestia, this message crushed any last remnants of resistance that might have still existed in Wonder Woman’s mind. Being Catwoman’s sex slave was now part of Diana’s core personality. With triumph shining from her eyes, Catwoman looked down on her new acquisition.

“Yeah, mind, body, and soul, but for starters I will use your body. Start sucking my dick, slut!”

"Yes, Mistress."

Wonder Woman sat up on her haunches. She leaned closer and pulled the dildo towards her mouth. First, she licked along its length several times, before she opened her mouth and engulfed the tip with her lips. With her eyes trained on her Mistress, she slowly pulled the phallus deeper into her mouth. Catwoman looked down on her new toy, with great satisfaction showing in her cruel eyes. She had managed to turn a superheroine into an obedient little sex slave. And not just any superheroine. It was Wonder Woman, one of the strongest of them. The arch villainess gripped Wonder Woman’s head and started to push, forcing her victim to deep-throat the 8-inch tool. And the amazon did not disappoint her. Like the good little slave, she had become, she took the full length of the massive fake-dick. For several minutes, Catwoman fucked the oral opening of the once proud superheroine.

Finally, Catwoman stopped.

“Okay, it is time to take your cherry. Get on the bed slave, on your back, and present your cunt.”

Eager to obey, Wonder Woman got in position and spread her legs obscenely wide. Her pussy was glistening, showing the three watchers how aroused she already was. With sensual movements, Catwoman crawled onto the bed. She knelt before the enslaved superheroine and picked up her legs, laying them over her shoulders. She guided the phallus to the amazon’s waiting vagina. Without hesitation, Catwoman pushed the head between the fleshy lips. With one shove, she entered the vagina to the hilt. Wonder Woman mewled in pleasure at being filled. Catwoman looked down at the other woman like a cat looks at her prey. And Diana had been her helpless prey, being played with like a mouse and then turned into a willing slave. The villainess enjoyed the look of bliss on the superheroines face. Her victim loved to be a sex slave. And she would forever connect the face of her Mistress with the immense pleasure she felt at this moment. That was the reason Catwoman chose this position. Soon, the amazon came with an ecstatic shout.

“Yes, Mistress! I’m cumming!”

For the next round, Catwoman ordered her slave to turn around and to kneel on all four. She wanted to take her doggy style. But more importantly, it was time for Wonder Woman to thank those two kittens, who had lured her into this trap. Manx and Siam had both shed their clothes by now and were watching the show with glee in their eyes. Catwoman asked them to join in.

“Get in front of our slave. It is time for Wonder Woman to say thank you. And the way a sex slave says thank you is of course by servicing the other person. Get to work, slave! Lick both their pussies. You may not come before you have given them at least two orgasms each.”

Obediently, the former superheroine began to suck on those two succulent pussies, taking turns between them. Both of them loved her work and soon were moaning almost as loud as she was. Encouraged by their reaction, Wonder Woman kept licking them enthusiastically. Catwoman pumped the strap-on steadily in her slave’s pussy. It almost seemed inevitable, that a sex slave of Catwoman’s would be such a talented pussy pleaser.

[Void]

Very fun hypno premise. I enjoyed it! I also enjoyed some of your Xena stories the other day - 'heroine submissively giving oral to a villain - and loving it' is one of my top triggers, so I was having a rare old time.

I recommend drawing it out a bit more - letting the scenes move a little bit slower and showing us a little more. I'm a sucker for struggle, so more back and forth with WW gradually being brought under the control of the hypnotic trap would also be welcome.

Oh, and I strongly recommend double spacing your paragraphs, either where you write the story or in the text box here before you post it here. When the paragraphs sit right on top of each other as a wall of text it isn't as easy or comfortable to parse as a reader. It would be a reasonably quick edit to make, and it might surprise you how much better it makes the stories read.

[Malice]

Oh, and I strongly recommend double spacing your paragraphs, either where you write the story or in the text box here before you post it here. When the paragraphs sit right on top of each other as a wall of text it isn't as easy or comfortable to parse as a reader. It would be a reasonably quick edit to make, and it might surprise you how much better it makes the stories read.

Jokes aside, I agree 100%!

Double spacing makes stories much enjoyable to read.

But that’s only half the battle: the part that’s hardest to get right, you already have because your stories are so good! (And yes, Void, the Xena ones in particular, but his Wonder Woman ones are great too, I might add.)

Also, the new Stories section could definitely benefit from some of your best work, it's actually valid for both of youse.

[VegaTaxeca]

Very fun hypno premise. I enjoyed it! I also enjoyed some of your Xena stories the other day - 'heroine submissively giving oral to a villain - and loving it' is one of my top triggers, so I was having a rare old time.

I recommend drawing it out a bit more - letting the scenes move a little bit slower and showing us a little more. I'm a sucker for struggle, so more back and forth with WW gradually being brought under the control of the hypnotic trap would also be welcome.

Oh, and I strongly recommend double spacing your paragraphs, either where you write the story or in the text box here before you post it here. When the paragraphs sit right on top of each other as a wall of text it isn't as easy or comfortable to parse as a reader. It would be a reasonably quick edit to make, and it might surprise you how much better it makes the stories read.

Hello Void,

thank you for your kind words. Yeah, I get where you write that this one was a bit quick. But that was kind of the purpose here, to help get back into the groove of writing.

Also thanks for your suggestions regarding the formatting. I will have a look into it, how to do it best.

[VegaTaxeca]

Oh, and I strongly recommend double spacing your paragraphs, either where you write the story or in the text box here before you post it here. When the paragraphs sit right on top of each other as a wall of text it isn't as easy or comfortable to parse as a reader. It would be a reasonably quick edit to make, and it might surprise you how much better it makes the stories read.

Jokes aside, I agree 100%!

Double spacing makes stories much enjoyable to read.

But that’s only half the battle: the part that’s hardest to get right, you already have because your stories are so good! (And yes, Void, the Xena ones in particular, but his Wonder Woman ones are great too, I might add.)

Also, the new Stories section could definitely benefit from some of your best work, it's actually valid for both of youse.

Hello Malice,

thank you for your nice feedback.

Regarding the formatting, I will have a look into, as already mentioned to Void.

[VegaTaxeca]

Okay, now I have double spaced all the paragraphs, including the dialogue. Is this better? Or should I keep the dialogue together and only do it for the other paragraphs?

[Malice]

Hey there,

Works a treat, twice as more enjoyable than it was.

Great job taking in the feedback.

[Void]

It looks great - it's such an improvement to the presentation. It reads really well.

To your question, how you have done it now works great and reads absolutely fine. It is correct to double space the dialogue so long as it's starting a new paragraph - but you don't have to always separate the dialogue from the rest of the text. If it's a 'dialogue tag' or 'attribution' then it can, and should, hang out in the same paragraph with the dialogue. Think things like 'he said', 'she shouted', 'they cried' - that's all stuff that would hang up before or after the dialogue in the same paragraph. You can do the same with something like:

He raised an eyebrow, 'Are you sure, my lady?'

The finely-dressed woman gave a demure smile, 'Oh, I'm quite sure'.

'As you wish, my lady.' With a curt bow, the butler turned to leave the room, 'I will pass your wishes on to our guests.'

The text isn't saying 'he said', but it is still making clear who is about to speak, or who just spoke, whilst also telling us something about them in the story. It could keep going like this in the same paragraph if the character keeps speaking, or you could break it up into smaller paragraphs for each time that character starts speaking again - that is more of a stylistic thing where whatever you decide will be correct. Good examples from your story here where something looks like a dialogue tag that would rather sit next to the dialogue are:

'The detective smiled knowingly'
'The detective's smile grew wider'
'Kyle's tone became more commanding'
'The detective's voice was now triumphant'

Those are all things that can hang out in the paragraph with the dialogue of what the character is about to say. But they can still absolutely hang up above the dialogue in a different paragraph as well - particularly if you want to really emphasise both what the character is doing and what they are about to say. When something gets a whole paragraph to itself, especially if it's just a single line or a couple of words, it puts a lot of emphasis on it to the reader. But yes, honestly however you decide to go will be correct and read fine.

[Malice]

It looks great - it's such an improvement to the presentation. It reads really well.

To your question, how you have done it now works great and reads absolutely fine. It is correct to double space the dialogue so long as it's starting a new paragraph - but you don't have to always separate the dialogue from the rest of the text. If it's a 'dialogue tag' or 'attribution' then it can, and should, hang out in the same paragraph with the dialogue. Think things like 'he said', 'she shouted', 'they cried' - that's all stuff that would hang up before or after the dialogue in the same paragraph. You can do the same with something like:

He raised an eyebrow, 'Are you sure, my lady?'

The finely-dressed woman gave a demure smile, 'Oh, I'm quite sure'.

'As you wish, my lady.' With a curt bow, the butler turned to leave the room, 'I will pass your wishes on to our guests.'

The text isn't saying 'he said', but it is still making clear who is about to speak, or who just spoke, whilst also telling us something about them in the story. It could keep going like this in the same paragraph if the character keeps speaking, or you could break it up into smaller paragraphs for each time that character starts speaking again - that is more of a stylistic thing where whatever you decide will be correct. Good examples from your story here where something looks like a dialogue tag that would rather sit next to the dialogue are:

'The detective smiled knowingly'
'The detective's smile grew wider'
'Kyle's tone became more commanding'
'The detective's voice was now triumphant'

Those are all things that can hang out in the paragraph with the dialogue of what the character is about to say. But they can still absolutely hang up above the dialogue in a different paragraph as well - particularly if you want to really emphasise both what the character is doing and what they are about to say. When something gets a whole paragraph to itself, especially if it's just a single line or a couple of words, it puts a lot of emphasis on it to the reader. But yes, honestly however you decide to go will be correct and read fine.

Hey there,

I absolutely do not want to start a row here, but I'd like to share a different perspective on the question.

Dialogue tags are a necessity, and at times, like:

The detective's voice was now triumphant.

—it’s more than appropriate to have tags that move the story forward or crank up the intensity in a select passage.

However, using simple tags like "she said" or "Diana said" is often enough to maintain the flow without interrupting the reading experience.

I feel sometimes an overwritten tag can get me out of mine.

I don’t mind a beautifully written sentence, but when it comes to understanding who’s talking, I like simplicity. Unless ones feel the need to express that a character screams, yells, or begs, or something similar.

And even then, the last thing I want is for tags to tell rather than show. It’s all about finding the right balance.

Finally, Catwoman stopped.

“Okay, it is time to take your cherry. Get on the bed, slave, on your back, and present your cunt.”

In this instance, I totally get who’s talking, and the tag "Catwoman said" would be redundant.

We’re given information about the character’s actions, so we can assume who’s speaking. Plus, in the context of this type of story, it’s sometimes easy to tell who’s who by the content of the dialogue.

“Yes, mistress”

This is obviously Wonder Woman’s lines, so the need for a tag might not be warranted.

All I’m saying is that it really depends on the writer’s intent, and I’m actually really really curious to hear what you think about it.

[Void]

I absolutely do not want to start a row here, but I'd like to share a different perspective on the question.

I suspect our only disagreement is on whether I actually implied this story needs more dialogue tags. I was elaborating on when text would share a paragraph with dialogue; not expressly saying the story needed more dialogue tags - though I did later point at a few paragraphs that looked like dialogue tags that could be in the same paragraph with the dialogue they are tagging.

In terms of how much, and how often, to use dialogue tags... it's really a stylistic choice where people differ quite dramatically about what they prefer. Ideally, the tags don't draw attention to themselves whilst also making sure the reader is clear on what is happening. This means, as you say, you can take contextual clues from what is being said that mean no dialogue tags are required, or there can essentially be a dialogue tag in the previous paragraph that makes it clear instead. As a rule of thumb, if a scene has two speakers then you can be sparing with dialogue tags (but still use some, especially if there has been a paragraph of action or description between speakers), but if a scene has more than two speakers then you really want more frequent dialogue tags - only omitting them if the context of the dialogue makes it *crystal* clear who is speaking. You can omit them because you actually want the reader to be unclear on who is speaking, but my goodness you have to be careful with that.

I'm a fan of action tags, where the story is shown to be moving along in such a way that makes clear who is speaking, but everything is a good tool and nothing should be used too often. Like, an action tag is only useful if it is expressing something that helps the story in some way. Some people prefer only 'he said/he called/he murmured/he shouted' (but very specifically 'he said') because these are the most invisible tags as people read, and they would genuinely caution you not to include adverbs unless you feel you absolutely have to ('he said angrily') because they call too much attention to the tag and stop them being invisible. I personally feel 'he said' starts to become repetitive and overly functional if it keeps getting wheeled out, and *that* calls attention to the tags for me, but everyone reads differently.

Also, I should have mentioned in my previous post, but you can merge action tags with attribution tags in the same paragraph of dialogue. Something like:

He peered up at the heroine floating in the air before him. 'I'm not done yet, Stargirl,' he muttered darkly as he heaved himself back to his feet.

Stylistically, you can put the action tag in a paragraph before the character speaks, but it is almost always better, in my opinion, to bring it into the same paragraph with the dialogue unless you are really wanting more emphasis on the description of the character. I would also generally caution against having too many short paragraphs together, but that's a whole other thing.

Apologies for the tangent on your thread, Vega! I hope any of this was useful. Regardless - we enjoy your stories, however you tell them!

[VegaTaxeca]

No need for apologies. I have to thank both of you for this little lesson in tagging and formatting. This feedback is very much appreciated.

[Malice]

Well, in all fairness the conversation is interesting and courteous.

Plus I think it really goes to show we both appreciate your stories.

And as fellow writers, it's cool to have the opportunity to talk about how we envision our craft and possibly help each other.

On that note and if you ever need a hand with the new WordPress interface lemme know, I'd be happy to help either of you get used to the new toys and how things are working.