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There were parts of this that were fantastic. Overall, I liked the story and the darker tone it took, especially towards the end. The turn around with Rezo and Batgirl was a great shift in dynamics - I'm an absolute sucker for those inversions - and you built it up well. Some of the descriptions going on were genuinely great, and the imagery you used for when things got sexy was pretty affecting.

The writing was good, particularly in the moments you were invested in describing. The stripping scenes were all brilliant and well thought out, and the way you handled the stabbing was spellbinding. There were times when I think you tried to move the story along too quickly where the writing became a bit blunt and rushed - just giving a functional description of events happening - which would benefit from a touch more fleshing out. Likewise if you were to reread and edit out missed words or typos, or descriptions that don't quite work, the story would benefit tremendously. Nit-picking aside, I really enjoyed this. It certainly woke me up.

Great story. I agree with Void, only I was too immersed to notice the nitpicking. Write more!

Huh... Can you bring it back?

Yes, you can.

The Internet of all things does include Supergirl!

Rule 34 Rocks

Did anyone save this story before it was deleted? I've tried to find it on the WayBackMachine, talking with Bare Thighz, etc. but no luck.