Unmaskee wrote:The script is... long that's all I can really say.
Probably best ditch the prologue I'd say and just try to trim things as much as possible. Apart from that we seem fine.
I would like to keep at least part of the prologue as it shows DOC as a formidable villain who nearly defeated KW, rather than us being told about him via chunks of expositional dialogue. Maybe it could be cut back to just a couple of shots as a flashback while KW is talking to SG about the previous capture of DOC: First we see DOC blasting KW with electricity and unmasking her as she lies twitching on the ground. Then we see KW spray something in DOC's face, making him pass out.
As the flashback ends, we see KW (in her civilian guise) holding the same spray as she talks to SG. Close-up on the label:
KW puts the spray into a pouch on her utility belt and then picks up a sealed packet of tights which has the following label:
I thought this sort of labelling would be a nice tribute to the 60s Batman series.
MightyHypnotic wrote:Shooting an actress getting dressed takes about 30-40 seconds plus whatever close ups we add in. That's simple scene since it requires no rehearsing. If she's doing it while talking on the phone it's a little trickier since any flub in lines requires a full retake and redress...
In regards to shortening the script, an example would be when the Dr is stalling for time and Supergirl has a couple of lines regarding wasting her time, you could just replace that with a shot of her looking/acting a little impatient and achieve the same result.
So anything that can be achieved by looks or quick takes are always good. Save the dialogue for the important stuff.
The changing while on the phone would just be limited to KW unbuttoning her blouse and maybe toying with props such as the spray and the packet of tights. After the conversation, we would then cut to KW (dressed in just her tights) hanging up her civvies and grabbing her costume from the wardrobe/rack. The actual dressing scene would just be very brief shots of the boots and gloves going on, ending with a longer shot of KW fully putting on the mask.
Maybe the Knightwoman and Supergirl transformations could mirror each other?
Supergirl releases her hair from its ponytail and takes off her glasses.
Supergirl rips open her blouse as we zoom-in on the diamond symbol.
Dissolve.
Zoom-out from the yellow shield symbol on Knightwoman's costume as she takes it from the wardrobe.
Knightwoman pulls on a purple glove.
Knightwoman pulls on a purple boot.
Knightwoman fastens her hair in a ponytail and pulls on her mask.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
I've given it a bit more thought and maybe the prologue/flashback should be dropped if losing it helps streamline the video. In narrative terms, having DOC unmask KW at the very start of the video would probably lessen the impact of DOC and SG's later attempts at unmasking.
My original thinking behind the prologue was to "hit the ground running" and show the evil villain DOC in action as soon as possible. Would it be possible to instead make the news report and conversation a bit more pacey, as it seems we have several minutes of talky exposition before the girls get suited-up?
Vital information from the news report: Supervillain Dr Obi Caffi has escaped custody.
Vital information from Supergirl: Knightwoman, we're needed!
Vital information from Knightwoman: I have another mission, but I'll be with you as soon as I've completed it.
Supergirl suits-up.
Knightwoman suits-up.
Dr Obi Caffi starts throwing lightning bolts.
That's probably a gross oversimplification of the opening sequence, but I don't think we'll have too much time for build-up in a 20 to 30-minute video which features transformations, a dunking, simulated b/g sex, unmasking and g/g sex.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
Sounds good HA, i'll do my best to get that done this weekend! I'll also include kw getting dressed and change sg's death if there are no exceptions of other suggestions...
One more thing to consider is keeping sets/locations down to a bare minimum. When Supergirl steps out into the corridor, for example, MH suddenly has another location to light for the sake of a single shot.
Looking at the stills from when Kendra recently borrowed MH's studio, it seems the back wall of the Knightcave could be set-up in the same room as Supergirl's office:
Then it would be a question of whether the hot tub is in a location where the rest of the lair stuff can be shot? Or would it be a matter of shooting just the dunking in that room/set and then using somewhere else for the unmasking and sex scene?
If it is a matter of going somewhere else after the dunking, what are people's preferences?
Maybe it's a matter of suggesting your ideal choice(s) so MH can say yay or nay and then look into booking her? (Seeing as he seems quite positive over the possibility of getting Samantha Ryan.)
A couple more blondes who have worked with MH in the past are Lexi Belle and Ashley Edmonds. What d'ya think of these ladies?
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"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
Ok here's my thoughts on Lexi. First, I love Lexi Belle. I don't shoot with her more because I have to go thru an agency and that alone isn't a big deal, but I usually have other girls that I can just call and shoot with so with Lexi, I usually have to have a production idea in mind to do it.
As far as her playing Supergirl, I don't think it's a bad idea, but usually, because she is a little smaller, I would cast her as , say, a Harley Quinn character or a smaller gutsy type heroine. Supergirl, in my eyes anyway, is a little taller, a little more subdued, just a different kind of delivery. Not that Lexi isn't capable of it, she is. So if that's what you want, I can get her.
Otherwise I can see who else I can get for the part.
MH in your earlier works with Lexi she seemed much more involved in g/g porn than peril. Do you think she would do a good job playing a superheroine in peril?
I would love to see who is available, lexi so far was my fisat choice but if there are other options, im open. And ill say it again, she doesn't have to fit a certain mold, just hqs to be HOT!
Hannah Perez was an interesting suggestion. Even though she's not blonde, I think she could really be convincing as both a heroine and a villainess.
Lexi, however, has amazing energy. She could bring something to the role as a feisty young Supergirl who is sent batshit crazy by her conversion.
Besides, the character doesn't have to be a literal adaptation of Supergirl. (Just as Knightwoman uses elements of both Batgirl and Batman.) She's likely to have a new name anyway, so we can mix things up a bit depending on which models are available and what SG costumes are in the wardrobe.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
Does the Supergirl costume necessarily need to be an off-the-peg version? Depending on what's already in the wardrobe and the size of the model, would it be possible to throw something together?
Perhaps a combination of this leotard:
with this skirt:
and this cape and boots:
and these tights:
All that's missing is a diamond symbol. Which could possibly be stuck-on and later ripped-off.
I'm not personally requesting any of those garments. I'm just putting the idea of a "mix and match" costume out there as an option.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
I am loving that last picture..my god...the skill being used with that magic wand..whoa! Its nice that she is letting her moan and scream a bit....but i would shut her up with a ballgag...let her bite down on that yummy rubber ball! This looks incredible
Im all for a little mixing up of the cosutme. Couple preferences though, id rather not se the material to "glossy" for the unitard. I would like that to be more traditional. And I would like it to be a unitard, call me crazy but I always prefered one pieces to the belly showing. Those tights are perfect, id rather not have the skirt too short or the neck too low either, if the costume is too slutty, it takes away the purity of the heroine away and kills the innocense of whatever happens to her. To me the perfect supergirl costume is rye's 1984 but add those sexy tights.
As also stand by lexi as first choice but still open to other options for supergirl.
My two cents:Samantha Ryan,Lexi belle,that actress who played Supernerd(can't think of her name right now)Jade Indica,and Hannah perez for actresses,AND a lot of ots carries(with butt slaps) and phrases like"Can't fight it" and "I'm cumming" when and if there are forced orgasms.Recently bought Supernerd and the ONLY thing missing were the magic words"I'm cumming"If it has these things,you'll have my money for sure.
Richpartist wrote:My two cents:Samantha Ryan,Lexi belle,that actress who played Supernerd(can't think of her name right now)Jade Indica,and Hannah perez for actresses,AND a lot of ots carries(with butt slaps) and phrases like"Can't fight it" and "I'm cumming" when and if there are forced orgasms.Recently bought Supernerd and the ONLY thing missing were the magic words"I'm cumming"If it has these things,you'll have my money for sure.
Are you thinking of contributing to the custom? If so, there's a Supergirl & Knightwoman script posted above which DrObiCaffi is currently trimming to remove much of the dialogue. While the long speeches will have to be trimmed, it wouldn't be a problem at all to add succinct dialogue such as "Can't fight it" and "I'm cumming". In fact, those lines could be used by both Supergirl and Knightwoman at different points in the story.
OTS carries seem easy enough. These would need to be slotted-in before the male villain dies, though. SG could be carried to the tub-dunking trap and KW could be carried after she has been electrocuted and before she is tied-up.
The script is for a two-girl custom with a male villain in the first half and girl/girl sex in the second half.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
On the subject of the male villain, would it be more practical if the lower half of the Doc's face is masked? Maybe a surgeon's mask, a TDKR Bane mask or a Hannibal Lecter mask?
This would then mean his dialogue could be recorded separately.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
If you are still looking for feedback and this is the final draft, I will change the title so that it reflects progress. Sometimes when a reader sees the same thread popping they will tend to overlook it, call it thread fatigue. I will try to read it later today. Busy day of editing.
I'll compile a list of girls in the next couple of days. If you want Lexi then that solves that. Can Obi send me the word document? It's easier for me to read a script that way.
So far I haven't seen anyone I would like more than Lexi but I would still like to see a list. Yes, I am supposed to be shortening the script, but MH if u want what we have and shorten the dialogue where u see fit I don't know about everyone else, but I trust you. If that is more work than U want, I will be more than happy to get to shortening the script asap and emailing u the WORD FILE.
Ok you shorten it, I like that better. I always hate making dialogue changes after the fact because its hard to say if it's important dialogue.
After you're done send me the word file. The word document lets me see the pages and I can get a physical feel for the script. I'm old school, what can I say If it looks good, then we're good to go with the script and we can lock that down.
I have 2 potential girls that I have reached out to, I won't spill the beans just yet but soon. And of course we'll leave Lexi in the running.
if anyone thinks this thread is dominating the Superheroine Lounge I can move it to the Producers Area. Let me know.
OK, I have the script all set. I can't seem to attach the WORD file to any messages, emails or posts through this site though so I have to find a way to get it to ya MH! for the rest of you here it is! I changed Super Girl's death, added the Knight Woman getting dressed (not written very well but how hard can that be to shoot), shortened some dialogue and made a small change. I thought it might be hot to see Super Girl forcefully bound after the dunking scene instead of her waking up bound again. Other than that, all the same just less talking. Hopefully we can call this the FINAL DRAFT! If anyone wants the word file PM me your email address and I will send it to you via yahoo, otherwise, Here it is...
Office Set
A beautiful young woman is at an office desk, looking at a computer screen. She is wearing a white button up blouse, a dark skirt and tan tights. She adjusts the glasses on her face when she clicks on a link to a news story...
A beautiful young woman is at an office desk, looking at a computer screen. She is wearing a white button up blouse , a dark skirt and tan tights. She adjusts the glasses on her face when she clicks on a link to a news story.
NEWS ANCHOR
We have breaking news regarding the trial of known terrorist Dr. Obi Caffi. We have just received word that he has escaped from custody. Details at this point are sketchy, but we do have confirmation that this evil genius is back at large! We can.....
The beautiful woman clicks off the link b4 the story ends and picks up the phone on her desk. She presses a few buttons and looks around to make sure no one was around to hear her make the top secret call she was about to make. A woman answers on the other end.
Super Girl
It's me, did you see?
A close-up of a woman's mouth on the phone.
Knightwoman
Yeah, I saw, you should get to his hideout right away, he just might be stupid enough to try to obtain supplies there before he runs.
Super Girl
OK, I'll meet you there. Together we can....
Knightwoman
I am on my way to New York, there's a bank robbery in progress there, you'll have to take this one on your own.
Super Girl
A bank robbery in ? Let the Police handle that one. Dr. Caffi is way more threatening.
Knightwoman
Yes, but you took care of him before with no problems, you got this.
Super Girl
I know but I have a bad feeling about this. Let's take this scum bag down together.
Knightwoman
You KNOW I can handle this quickly, why don't you head to his hideout and I will get there as soon as I can. We shouldn't waste any more time arguing, you need to get going.
Super Girl
:::sighs:: I guess you're right but HURRY!
Knight Woman hangs up the phone and starts getting dressed. She pulls on a pair of tan tights, followed by purple tights. She steps into a purple leotard and pulls it over her body. Next, she throws on a pair of purple gloves and then moves on to her boots, she ties a yellow cape around her neck and finally pulls a mask over her beautiful face. Knight Woman is off once again.
Super girl hangs up the phone and leaves her desk area. She gets to a hallway leading to a back exit of her office and begins to walk backwards. She takes off her glasses and tosses them aside as she scans for potential witnesses to the pending transformation. She then moves her hands down to her blouse, slowly undoing each button. She spreads her shirt open revealing a blue leotard top with a red and yellow "S" on her chest. By the time she gets outside, she is also wearing a Red cape, a short red frilly skirt and knee-high Red Boots. She turns around and takes off for the sky.
She lands outside the entrance to an old factory and enters. She is hesitant but confident at the same time. She passes through a few rooms and turns around a few corners until she comes up to man frantically working on a syringe. Super Girl scans the area fast while his back is still turned and sees no immediate threat.
Super Girl
That was very stupid doctor. You should not have come back here.
The doctor was startled. He jumps and turns around. He is nervous and scared,
Dr. Obi Caffi
Super Girl, you... I just need my medicine. I had to come back. I wasn't going to run. I was going to turn myself back in, I swear.
Super Girl
Do you honestly think I would believe you would turn yourself back in? You ARE stupid. Let's go Doctor, you've wasted enough of my time.
Dr. Obi Caffi
OK, just let me....
He quickly raises his hands and electricity shoots from his finger tips. They merely crash into the heroines chest and disappear without so much as a blink from Super Girl. When the bolts wear out, Super Girl brushes off her sexy unitard and rolls her eyes at the villain.
The doctor, still scared charges at Super Girl in desperation and throws a few punches and kicks. Our heroine dodges a few and blocks a few with ease, but allows the last punch thrown to strike her directly in the face. Dr. Caffi falls to the ground holding his hand.
Super Girl
To think I was worried about coming here on my own. You are pathetic. Enough of all this, let's go!
She grabs him by the shirt with one hand and launches him to his feet.
Dr. Caffi
::panting:: Ok, ok. I surrender. I only ask that you PLEASE let me take my medicine, without it, I will die.
Super Girl
Do it fast, :::She shoves him over to the table she originally caught him working at::: you've caused enough panic.
The doctor grabs the syringe and an evil grin comes over his lips.
Dr. Caffi
Thank you Super Girl! this is just... what... I... NEEDED!!!!
The doctor plunges the syringe into his arm and his body shakes and twitches a little.. He closes his eyes and breathes in deep. He breathes out just as deep and turns around.
Dr. Obi Caffi
You see Super Girl, this all part of my plan. Say good-bye to the "GOOD" life!!!
Super Girl
. :: She rolls her eyes:: Let's go Doc...
The doctor raises his hands and another burst of lightning jolts out from his fingertips but THIS time, the electricity slams into Super Girl's body and forces her backwards and slams her into the nearest wall.
Super Girl
Wha... What's happening? How? How did...
Another blast of lightning hits the gorgeous gal and she screams and twitches in pain still standing up against the wall.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Oh Super Girl, you have no idea how long I have waited for this!
He sprays her again with electricity and laughs. He holds on a little longer making the heroine struggle against the wall. When the lightning stops this time he looks at his hands, very satisfied.
Dr. Obi Caffi
This is amazing! This... this is so amazing, but let's mix things up a little. Shall we?
He approaches Super Girl as she regains her balance, she looks ready to put up a fight. She is excited that he decided to end the berates of lightning bolts. "This is my chance", she thinks. She swings at the doctor but she moves much slower than she is used to and he easily dodges her blow.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Tsch... So close. Tell you what. Try again.
She looks at her hands baffled at their lack of speed and power.
Super Girl
My... my powers?
She swings again. This time he ducks and pushes her back.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Whoa, that was close. One more time.
She swings even weaker, and just like her enemy a few short minutes ago, she landed the blow. But just like before- barely nothing happened. The doctor straightens out his head and smiles.
Dr. Obi Caffi
My turn!!!
An upper cut swing from the doctor lands on the chin of Super Girl and she groans in pain. He comes at her again and again with punches, knees and kicks to her face, her gut and below her belt. Blow after blow slams into the Super Heroine as she grunts and yelps in pain.
One more punch to Super Girl below the belt and she folds in half, dropping to her knees struggling to breathe.
Dr. Obi Caffi
So... THIS is what it feels like to have TOTAL dominance over your opponent. Kind Of Fun Don't you think?
A kick to the face sends the heroine onto her back. She rolls around on the floor. Coughing and choking. Her eyes are open staring off to the ceiling wondering how this EVER could have happened. She finally rolls over onto her hands and knees and stands herself up.
Super Girl
I don't know how you are doing this. ::breathing heavily:: But I will never give up...
She squints her eyes at the doctor, hoping to blast him with her laser-eyes. All that comes out though is a weakened shot that hits that doctor and barely even budges him. Super Girl's eyes widen in terror as the doctor brushes of the spot the laser hit him. He chuckles.
He raises his hands again and THRUSTS them toward the damaged Super Girl and once again lightning shoots from his fingers. Once again the lighting strikes the heroine and slams her back into the wall. She hits it standing with her arms stretched out, bent up at the elbows, palms facing out. This time, the doctor doesn't let up when Super Girl hits the wall, he continues firing at her as her screams get louder. She twitches and squirms up against the wall, almost as if she is bound against it by the electricity shooting at her.
Super Girl
Ppppppppllllleeeeeaaaaasssseeee nnnnnnnooooooo.....
But the doctor continues. straining harder as if trying to shoot more out at her. Finally he lowers his hands and the lightning stops. Super Girl slides down the wall and eventually to the floor landing on her beautiful ass. She's breathing heavily as she keels over onto her shoulder, staring off into space. She eventually turns over on to her stomach, a blank look still in her eyes. Finally, a long blink and ans she forces herself onto her hands and knees. Her head rolls as if she can't control it. A couple of short looks back and forth and she starts crawling. It takes every ounce of her strength and energy just to move her arm forward, but she starts to move. The doctor slowly walks over to her and kicks her in the middle of her back forcing her back onto the ground.
Dr Obi Caffi
Where do you think you're going bitch?
She starts to get back up on her knees but he grabs her ankles and pulls her back over to the middle of the room. She kicks and screams desperately trying to get free from his grip but he is clearly stronger than her now.
Dr. Obi Caffi
It's over Super girl. You are mine now. You have no place to go. Save your strength, you are going to need it.
One more tiny little shot of lightning from his fingers and she jolts violently then slumps back on the floor. She doesn't speak, she doesn't look at him, she just twitches with her mouth open, face on the ground. This time she is unable to get back on her knees. The doctor moves in front of her and sits down blocking her path. He grabs her by the shoulders and flips her over. He rests her back against him. His head next to hers and he starts whispering in her ear.
Dr Obi Caffi
You see Super Girl, I never needed medicine. ::the doctor looks forward and pets Super Girl's head while his right hand holds her waist::: I came here to give myself the FINAL dose of the... KRYPTONITE serum I have been working on. Ya see it's this serum that gave me the power to finally bring you quite literally to your knees. And don't worry. ::He pulls his hand from her head and reaches around her waist and meets his other hand. He then lifts them up onto her breasts to steal a feel as he continues:: I have more, LOTS MORE!
He pulls one hand away and reaches into his pocket. He lifts another syringe in front of Super Girl's face, she is too weak to struggle, but her eyes widen in fear staring at the syringe.
Super Girl
No, you can't, ::she winces in pain:: it will kill me.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Oh, I don't think so. See, I've deluded this batch with enough other materials to merely weaken you. I don't want you dead.
Her focus turned from the syringe to the doctor and she again squints, hoping to blast her enemy, put this time, her eyes just glow red and nothing even shoots out. She shakes her head and focuses again on the syringe as the doctor takes the top off. Her eyes widen in fright as she follows the needle as long as she can with her eyes.
Super Girl
What are you going to do to me?
The doctor pulls the heroine's head to the side and pulls the her hair away from her neck. He then plunges the needle into her well exposed neck. Super Girl's body shutters and shakes. She winces and blinks and a tear drops down her cheek. She Winces and twitches as the formula spreads. The twitching intensifies until she finally collapses in his lap.
Super Girl wakes up to find herself unable to move. Not necessarily because she is too weak, but because she is bound to a table slanted over a small pool. She shimmers and shakes, trying to get loose but no use. She can feel something inside her preventing her from using her Super strength. The serum. She looks down but all she can see is a board that has been placed around her neck separating her head from the rest of her body.
What she couldn't see is that she was strapped down with multiple straps. Her arms snug right up against her body and her legs tightly together. One strap ran high over her arms, between her shoulders and her elbows. The next over her forearms and stomach. There was another stretched over her beautiful pantyhosed thighs, and a final over her shins. She could also feel that her wrists were shackled separately. She kicks her feet around best she can and feels restraints, but it doesn't feel as if she was shackled in down there. She turns her head and sees the evil doctor walk over to her.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Ah, you are awake. Good. Allow me to explain to what is about to happen you. As you already know, my KRYPTONITE serum is running through your veins, keeping you too weak to break your binds. It is also breaking down the armor that is your, dare I say, ::he looks her up and down:: AWESOME body, allowing my OTHER formula, waiting for you in this pool, to penetrate your skin and absorb into your system, killing off the kryptonite serum and potentially make you even STRONGER than before I bested you. This other formula will make scramble your mind, making ME your MASTER! You will be evil. The process will be painful and may kill you, but whether u live or die, I win.
Super Girl
Oh my god. It won't work. It CAN'T WORK. Oh please Knight Woman come for me.
Another tear drips down her cheek.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Oh, and did I forget to mention the serum is also going to be used to spread my semen throughout your body, to mix with your DNA?
Super Girl
Your... Then you mean...
Dr Ob Caffi
That's right Super Girl. ::He runs his hands all over her body and stops between her legs and rubs harder:: I get to FUCK YOUR BRAINS out. HA HA. No pun intended. ::He looks her body up and down as he continues to rub her body all over:: What do you think? Shall we get started?
Super Girl
Oh my god this can't happen. Knight Woman where are you?
She squirms and wiggles best she can while the doctor runs his hands down her legs and stops when he reaches her boots.
Dr. Obi Caffi
We don't want the formula to penetrate your body too quickly. So we'll leave this costume on. I don't think we'll need these though.
He unzips her first boot and pulls it off. He runs both his hands over her thighs and calves once more of her beautiful legs are exposed. Super Girl starts sobbing as the evil doctor feels her up.
Super Girl
Please stop this. You can't do this to me. If you stop now, I promise I'll make Knight Woman go easy on you when she gets here. Just STOP!
The doctor unzips and pulls off the other boot, repeating the groping as he answers the heroine.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Knightwoman, HA! I have PLENTY of time to do what I need to do with you. Then, you will help me take her down!
With both boots off, he straps each ankle into its designated shackle. Her legs closed together.
Super Girl
:: she sobs:: Oh no. Please no, please don't do this, I ca....
He jams a ring gag into her mouth and pulls the strap around her head to strap it on. He pets her and stares at her desperate face, he begins to gently speak to her...
Dr. Obi Caffi
No can do Super Girl. :: His expression turns wicked:: It's time!
She starts to scream pleads at him as he walks away to a hanging control panel. He reaches the mechanism and turns around.
Dr. Obi Caffi
So long Super Girl. I look forward to meeting the "new you"
Dr. Caffi grabs the device and pushes a green button. Her chest heaves up and down as her breathing gets heavier and heavier. She freezes a little and her eyes widen in horror as the table she is on slowly starts to lower her towards the pool. Her head turns down trying to see when she will meet the water, then she looks back at the grinning doctor who is now rubbing his hands together. She squirms more and more as she gets closer and closer to the formula.
We see a tight shot of the heroines pantyhosed feet getting closer to the water, then we see and hear the gorgeous girl try to scream "please" through her gag. We move back down to her feet and see them touch the water. As soon as they reach, the water bubbles. We go back to a shot of the heroine from the waist up and we see her body LOCK UP and her head TILT STRAIGHT UP as she screams in pain from her toes reaching the poisoned water. We go back to the shot of her feet and we watch the rest of her body enter the pool. Her feet then ankles then calves, knees and thighs become saturated as they enter the pool. Next is her skirt with her hands held tight against her body. Her waist is now in, and her blue Leotard follows until the table stops at the board around her neck.
All that was going into the water was now in. The heroine shakes, and twitches and screams as much as she can through her gag. Her eyes, closed for the most part, open as she turns her head to look at the evil doctor. Begging for it all to stop.
The doctor watches and waits. He finally pushes another button on the device, slowly lifting the heroine from the water.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Well that's the end of stage 1. If we leave you in for too long at a time, it will probably kill you. We need to take our time. Don't worry it won't be too long.
Caffi walks back over to the wet heroine and starts touching her wet weakened body. She is breathing heavily, twitching and crying.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Wow. That went very well. And might I say you look very sexy all wet and punished like this. ::the camera pans up and down showing the heroines wet costumed body::: It may make fucking you later that much easier. Now on to phase 2.
She shakes her head no in a very weak manner as the doctor moves back to the device. He pushes the button again and the Heroine is dipped back into the water. She twitches and screams again, but the howls and twitches become less dramatic as the water seems numb the heroine's body. Caffi pushes the button that pulls the girl out of the water once again.
The heroine's eyes are open and look almost dead as water drips from her stockinged feet. Her head sort of dangles off her neck and a little drool pours out of her mouth. Caffi comes back over to examine her, to make sure she is weakened and not dead. Of course he can't resist the opportunity to grope her beautiful wet body again.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Well, I would say so far, so good. I think we can move on to the final phase of absorption.
He shifts some hair on her head and adjust some of clothing and notices her gag is still in her mouth.
Dr. Obi Caffi
I guess you don't REALLY need this anymore.
He removes the gag from her mouth and she immediately starts whispering pleads of mercy, fighting to open her eyes.
Super Girl
Please..... stop.... I'm too... weak... please.....
Dr. Obi Caffi
It will all be over soon.
Another trip over to the device and a push of the button lowers the sexy heroine back into the pool. this time she is too weak to scream. She just lays on the table and twitches. Her eyes still staring off to nowhere. The water continues to bubble as Super girl twitches and grunts and groans.
Super girl
Please..... make.... it..... stop. Knight Woman, where are you? Where are you?
She blinks as she talks, pushing tears from her eyes. Finally the pain is too much and the heroine passes out. Her head drops and Dr. Caffi pushes the button pulling her out for the final time.
Our heroine wakes again. She is very week but laying on a table free of binds. She is still fully clothed, and still wet. The doctor even put her boots back on her. She looks around and sees Dr. Caffi walking towards her.
Dr. Obi Caffi
All rested up? Good. I guess it's time for the final part of transformation.
Dr. Caffi moves toward the weakened heroine and she surprisingly is able to get up. She fights and struggles the best she can to avoid what she knows is coming next. She kicks and screams and punches but the evil Dr. over powers her once again.
Dr. Obi Caffi
I thought maybe we could do this the easy way. I guess not.
He grabs hold of the heroines hands and slams them onto the table she is on above her head. Waiting there are binds. He forces her hands into the binds and locks them up, all while the weakened heroine fights the best she can. Once her hands are secure, he moves to ankle binds, this time, the binds spread her feet apart. Once both feet are bound, he pulls a strap across her waist. Finally, the ring gag is inserted back into her mouth. Super girl continues to scream and moan despite her weakened state. Super Girl mumbles and continues to struggle as the doctor unzips his fly. He runs his hands through the sexy woman's hair and then moves it down her cheek. The doctor continues to move his hands down Super Girl's body. He reaches the red skirt and lifts it revealing her sexy panties. Super Girl begins to sob. he He rips open her tights and pulls her panties to the side. Caffi crawls on top of her and she begins kicking and screaming. He grabs her by the back of her hair and pulls her head back as he inserts his throbbing cock into her pussy. Her body jerks up and she screams in pain and horror at the same time. He continues to thrust in and out of the heroine as she shakes her head back and forth in desperation. She tries to kick but the straps around her ankles prevent from moving too much. This is how it all ends? The doctor continues to fuck her mercilessly and manages to pull her tits out of her leotard. He fondles, licks and kisses them while he builds towards orgasm. As time goes on the heroine calms her body but tears still drip from her eyes.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Ah, just as I imagined. You feel so good you dirty, dirty heroine. You are going to make me cum so hard, and when I do, your transformation will be complete. It's nearly time. It's nearly time. It's.... nearly... Uhhhhhhhhhhhh
The evil doctor shakes as he climaxes. The heroine can feel the cum cover her insides and her eyes slam shut. It catches some of the formula dripping inside her and she can feel an accelerated transfer of fluids throughout her body. She looks down to her body as the Dr. rolls off her. She is staring at her own body s if she is waiting for something horrible ot happen to her.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Ah. Just what I needed. Now for the final thing you need. ::He pulls out another syringe:: Just one little shot to get the juices flowing inside you.
He inserts the needle into her thigh showing instant results. Her eyes SLAM shut as she winces and screams as hard as she can through the gag. Her back arches up as far as it can through the binds. Her body shakes and twitches. She looks around wondering what is happening to her body. Her twitches slowly lessen as she blinks out more tears. She can tell this is it, life as she knew was now over forever. She could feel the change begin inside her until her eyes finally slowly slowly slowly close. When they finally open, they glow a strong and bright green light. A new villain is born. Fade to black
Knightwoman finally arrives at the villain's lair to find him in the middle of a (fake) fight with Super girl.
Super Girl
Glad you could make it. This creep never seems to run out of juice.
The ladies stand side by side.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Your little alien pal has spent hours absorbing my lightning bolts, Knightwoman, but a mere mortal like you won't last five minutes.
The male villain blasts Knightwoman with a bolt of electricity but she stands tall with her hands on her hips.
Knightwoman
Try harder! My conductor tights can take a hit of one-million volts.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Oh, you're a clever bitch! But your precious tights won't protect you when I pull them down and stuff them in your smug mouth.
Knightwoman
Don't waste your time trying to strip them off me. The waistband will only stretch if it scans my fingerprints. They're virtually indestructible too. It would take someone with superhuman strength to rip them open.
Super girl takes this as her cue to reveal herself as a villainess, She savagely rips huge holes in Knightwoman's dark-colored "conductor tights" exposing the standard tan tights underneath.
Knightwoman
What are you doing? Get off me!
With an evil grin, Super Girl turns to address her "master".
Super Girl
She's vulnerable. Blast her now!
Knightwoman
WHAT?! NOOOOOOOOOO!
The male villain strikes Knightwoman with another bolt of electricity. This time, her whole body shakes as she feels the full force of the villain's high-voltage assault. The heroine's legs buckle, but Super girl grabs her from behind before she can fall and props up her limp body in a bear hug.
Super Girl
Blast her again!
Knightwoman convulses as she's hit by another bolt. Super girl releases her from the bear hug and watches with amusement as she struggles to remain standing. Super girl grabs the eyeholes of Knightwoman's mask and pulls them down, turning the mask into a makeshift blindfold. With a playful push from Super girl, the weakened and temporarily blinded heroine stumbles to the ground.
Super girl mounts the fallen Knightwoman and continues ripping at the tights. She reaches into the leotard's leg hole and tugs at the (supposedly immovable) waistband, revealing the top of the tan tights underneath. She then pulls off one of Knightwoman's boots and completely tears away the foot of the darker tights, leaving the heroine's foot stockinged in just the under layer of tan nylon.
Super Girl
Blast her while she's down! Make her suffer!
Dr. Obi Caffi
Remember who's in charge here!
The villain is annoyed that his "slave" is literally calling the shots. He raises his hand and it crackles with green-tinged lightning as a reminder to Super girl that he still has plenty of Kryptonite in his system. However, he goes along with the idea and hits the wounded Knightwoman with yet another blast. The heroine writhes in agony and weakly reaches out to Super Girl.
Super Girl
Tie her up!
Dr. Caffi grabs some rope and moves behind Knightwoman. He pulls her hands behind her back and begins binding them together. He wraps more rope around her neck, shocked and in pain, she doesn't even struggle, she just stares at Super Girl DAZED!
Knightwoman
[weakly] Why?
Super Girl kneels down in front of Knightwoman and whispers softly in her ear.
Super Girl
Because you took the easy job and let that vile creep defile my perfect body. He thinks he's going to do the same to you, but you're all mine.
Super girl pulls aside the crotch of Knightwoman's leotard and slides her hand under both pairs of tights. The heroine gasps as she feels Super Girl's touch.
Super Girl
And to think you pulled on those tights believing you would be impenetrable. It didn't cross your naive mind that Super Girl would want your pussy.
Super Girl retracts her hand as she becomes aware of the lecherous gaze of the male villain who is now watching the women and literally salivating. Dr. Caffi stands after binding Knightwoman and now looms over the helpless Knightwoman, leering with ill intent. We hear the electrical crackling sound and the heroine gives out a helpless gasp as the fiend runs his hands over her twitching body.
Dr. Obi Caffi
Just enough juice to keep you tame. Another full blast right now would probably kill you and I'm not into dead girls.
He looks over to the hot tub and picks up a syringe of a purple formula.
Super Girl begins to see flashbacks of her own recent ordeal when she sees the villain pulling down Knightwoman's leotard slightly to shoulder level and injecting the syringe into the helpless heroine's neck.
Dr. Obi Caffi
A special formula I prepared just for you, Knightwoman. Your mind will try to stay feisty, but once you're stimulated, your body will crave orgasm after orgasm.
Dr. Obi Caffi
You'll feel better when I get you out of that costume and put you in a nice hot bath. But I should really get to know you first.
The villain reaches for Knightwoman's mask. He tries to pull at it but it won't budge. (Knightwoman has upped her security since their last meeting. It would take superhuman strength to force it off.) While he's distracted, a furious Super Girl seizes the opportunity to grab him from behind and break his neck, killing him instantly. His limp body falls to the ground, next to Knightwoman.
Still unable to stand, Knightwoman desperately tries to wriggle away on her belly as she becomes the focus of the super psycho's attention. Super Girl effortlessly stops the heroine by sinking a leather boot into the small of her back.
Super Girl
Another perverted fool distracted by your shiny disguise. Shame he didn't have X-Ray vision to see the weak human under all that spandex.
We see a brief "X-Ray vision" shot from Super girl's POV of Knightwoman on the ground, dressed in nothing but her mask.
Super Girl
I should have known your mask would be X-Ray-proof. Now I'm just going to prolong your agony as you wait for me to rip it off.
Super girl gently strokes Knightwoman's cheek and then slides her fingers under the mask, stroking the face underneath, but not exposing it YET. Knightwoman moans weakly. Super Girl then grasps the spandex playfully and tugs at it before letting go, allowing it to snap back into place. The cruel games continue with Super Girl pulling and stretching the mask in various ways, but always letting go at the very last second.
Then Super Girl notices a video camera mounted on a tripod and realizes the degradation of Knightwoman can be recorded for posterity...
Super Girl
Hmmm, I think I'll show EVERYONE the agony and ecstasy etched on your true face as I bring you to climax after climax in our sex tape. Not only will they know Knightwoman's real name, but they'll also know you as the biggest slut on the planet.
Knightwoman's eyes widen in horror at the revelation of her impending fate.
With the camera now set to record the grand unveiling, Super Girl begins to grab and pull at Knightwoman's mask, teasing the spandex away from her skin. As the mask starts sliding up her face, the desperate Knightwoman reaches for her utility with her utility belt with her bound hands and presses a small button. Suddenly, Super girl lets go of the half-off mask and backs away in agony as a green glow surrounds Knightwoman now has time to struggle out of her binds and adjust the mask to cover her face.
Knightwoman
Did you really think I wouldn't have a plan? You won't be able to get within ten feet of my utility belt's Kryptonite force field.
Super Girl
[hissing] Another fucking gadget!
Regaining her strength and confidence, Knightwoman gets up off the ground and puts her boot back on. She stands tall and adjusts the rest of her costume. The tights are a mess, but everything else is intact. She peels back her left glove and we see the communicator watch on her wrist.
Suddenly, the communicator glows red hot and Knightwoman is forced to unfasten it and throw it to the ground. We see Super Girl's eyes glowing red.
Super Girl
Guess what I'm going to burn next?
The green glow of the force field flickers out and Knightwoman's utility belt begins to glow red hot. She frantically unfastens it and throws it to the ground.
Super Girl
Take away your toys and you're just a helpless damsel hiding in a silly spandex costume. Now kneel before real power!
Knightwoman
Never!
Super girl grabs Knightwoman and forces her to kneel.
Super Girl
You knew this was coming. Your career as Knightwoman will be over in a few seconds.
Knightwoman:
[shrieking] NO! GET OFF ME!
Knightwoman fruitlessly tries to anchor the mask as Super girl begins to tease the spandex away from her skin. Finally, Super Girl gets a grip on the mask from the top and slowly pulls it back. Knightwoman exhales a sigh of defeat as the disguise falls away and her beautiful face is completely exposed. As a finishing touch, Super Girl unties Knightwoman's ponytail and lets her hair cascade down. She then grips the unmasked heroine's jaw and forces her to look straight down the lens of the camera.
Super Girl
So Knightwoman is really Briana Wayne
SG stands back with an evil look. At first it seems as if her job is finished, as though she is getting ready to leave KW in this state. But then she starts eye KW's body. She looks at parts of the KW costume that are ripped, revealing the supple flesh beneath. Super Girl's face changes from a look of triumph to a look of hunger...
Super Girl
I always found you attractive Briana. But until you decided against coming to my aide, I never wanted you. but now there's just something about seeing you there all tattered and helpless that is just making me want to ravish you!
Knightwoman
What did he do to you? Stop this. Help me!
Super Girl
Whatever he did to me may not have happened if you would have just ignored the other call like I suggested. Now, you will go through the same humiliation as I did. Only the whole world will see what happens to you!
She looks back over to the video camera and circles the fallen Knightwoman running her fingers through her hair. Slowly Super Girl begins sliding her hands up and down Knightwoman's body, caressing every groove and crevice. Then she slips her fingers in some of the tears in KW's costume. She grips them and tears them open some more. (This will let us see some skin while still leaving the majority of the costume intact.)
Knightwoman
Please.... haven't you destroyed me enough already?
Super Girl
Uhhhh you sound so desperate right now. That's making me even hotter!
Super Girl now goes for bigger game. She tears open Knightwoman's costume so that her ass is exposed. She spanks KW, as well as groping/sucking/licking her ass cheeks as well as her pussy. Then she moves to KW's breasts, similarly tearing open the costume (or simply pulling it down) and then proceeding to grope/suck/lick and worship the breasts. Knightwoman's continues to squirm and struggle, begging her to stop. Super Girl pulls down her own top and force feeds her breasts to Knightwoman. When Super Girl has bored with this, she stands up over Knightwoman. Knightwoman breathes a sigh of relief, believing her ordeal to be over. But instead, SG begins to tie the heroine up. She ties KW's arms straight behind her back. Super Girl now grabs strap-on and kneels next to Knightwoman and rubs the strap-on over the heroine's face. Super Girl stands up once more and slowly, sensually straps on the dildo.
Knightwoman
How can you do this to me? you have to stop.
We now see how demented SG has actually become. She begins getting rough with KW's body. Breathing heavily in anticipation with a look of determination on her face, she throws the heroine onto her stomach and voraciously continues to suck, lick, and slap her body. Then she takes the strap-on and lines it up with Knightwoman's pussy.
Knightwoman
Oh God no!
Super Girl thrusts viciously into Knightwoman 's pussy and begins mercilessly fucking her doggy-style. She grabs the arms that are tied behind Knightwoman 's back so that she can pull the heroine harder and harder onto the cock. We see a close-up of the horrified Knightwoman's face as Super Girl rams the dildo in and out of her. Her eyes slam shut in agony at almost every thrust. We see behind Super Girl and how hard she is forcing the dildo inside her. Super Girl continues until Knightwoman is forced into a screaming, thrashing orgasm, during which she continues to cry in protest and denial. Afterwards, the heroine lays there like a tenderized lump of meat, defeated and barely conscious.
Super Girl
And now KNIGHTWOMAN, you will slake my lust!
She leans over KW and begins kissing her on the lips. As she does this, she reaches down and unties Knightwoman's hands. She looks down at Knightwoman's hands then to her own crotch and tears open a hole.
Super Girl
Touch Me!
Knightwoman, too weak to fight back looks at Super Girl and then between her legs. She closes her eyes in disgust as she touches the turned heroine's wet pussy. Super Girl moans loudly, her eyes rolling back into her head. She caresses her own breasts as she enjoys Knightwoman's fingers. Soon, she crawls forward and positions her pussy over Knightwoman's face.
Super Girl
Now, lick my cunt you whore! Lick it until I CUM!
Super Girl sits up vertically over KW at first, massaging her breasts as she gets eaten out. Then she leans forward on the ground as she inches closer to climax. We see her face contorted in pleasure and her moans growing louder until she can no longer hold back. She grinds and pumps her hips forward against Knightwoman's face and has a mind-shattering orgasm.
Super Girl lays to the side of Knightwoman, panting exasperatedly, her eyes closed, with a soft smile of contentment on her face. Because she untied her foe for the sake of her own sexual pleasure, Knightwoman is actually free and even though the heroine is fatigued, she knows this is her only chance to undo the horrors she has endured. She takes the opportunity to crawl, weakly, back towards where her utility belt had earlier fallen on the floor. The belt has cooled off by now, and Knightwoman can only hope that the kryptonite function still works properly. Super Girl, still blinded by her own climax, is unaware of Knightwoman attempt for redemption. She lays there moaning contentedly, softy rubbing her breasts and pussy with her fingers. Knightwoman succeeds in reaching the belt and with what strength she has left, she reattaches it and reactivates the kryptonite force field. Immediately, Super Girls' moans of pleasure turn into moans of pain. Still laying on the floor, her eyes pop open, wide with fear.
Super Girl
What?! How did you...? Then looking at Knightwoman with her utility belt back on, she cries, NO!
As Super Girl squirms on the floor, Knightwoman starts to feel overcome by the turn of events. Although she started out just wanting to escape SG's evil clutches, she is now the one in control, and her motives begin to change. She kicks Super Girl around lightly as the villainess's powers drain. Super Girl attempts to crawl away, but she can barely put up a fight as the effects of the kryptonite grow stronger. Eventually, Knightwoman starts to take out her feelings of betrayal on Super Girl sexually. She repays the spanking and the roughhousing, tearing off parts of Super Girl's costume.
Knightwoman
What happened to you? How could you do this to me? You know I would be here, but I had to help innocent civilians first. You used to understand that. Now look at you. What has REVENGE gotten you? Was it worth it? Did it feel good to abuse me like that?
Knightwoman begins to breath heavier as the thought of revenge actually starts to excite her.
Knightwoman
Did it feel good to have such POWER and CONTROL over a helpless victim?
She begins to rub her own body up and down.
Knightwoman
I guess there's only way to find out.
Knightwoman pins SG to the ground and licks her breasts, neck, and begins voraciously kissing the evil heroine. While straddling Super girl she reaches for the strap-on and secures it on her waist. She grabs Super Girl's hands one by one and puts them over her head. With one hand holding Super Girl's hands, Knightwoman uses her other to slide the strap-on into the fallen villainess' pussy. Super girl, too weak to struggle, once again shows an expressionless face as she is fucked by her own strap-on.
Knightwoman
Oooh, that is exciting. Let's see how your tongue feels.
She straddles Super Girl's face and jabs her to let her know she wants her to lick. Knightwoman's eye's close and her head tilts back as Super Girl begins. She thrusts up and down, running her fingers through her own hair as Super Girl works her magic. Inevitably, Knightwoman reaches a climax as she writhes on top of the newly born villainess. As her body relaxes she stands up over Super Girl, still panting. Super Girl continues to moan in pain. The kryptonite has made her so weak that she does not have even the strength of an ordinary mortal at this point.
Knightwoman
I'm sorry it has to come to this, Super Girl. But you are simply too dangerous to be allowed to stay in our world.
She twists the knob on her belt controlling the power of the kryptonite. Super Girl screams as the green light glows stronger and hums louder. Super Girl isn't dieing fast enough so Knight Woman increases the power to the max and Super Girl screams harder and louder until suddenly her tense body falls limp. Super Girls misery is finally over.
Knightwoman takes the camera that Super Girl was using to expose her secret identity and destroys it. She pulls her costume back on, weakly, then picks her mask back up and warily places it on her head before heading out the door. She pauses and looks sorrowfully back once more at the fallen body of SG before she walks out. The camera pans down to Super Girls lifeless body and fades out.
Well, we've gone down from 8078 words to 7509, yet I feel it still needs a lot of trimming. Much of the dialogue is just telling us what's happening on-screen. Which may be necessary in a piece of writing, but is redundant when the audience can see the action for themselves.
It's fine for the villains to engage in a bit of headfuckery with the taunting. However, the characters don't need to give a running commentary on every little detail.
Sorry if this comes across as negative as I do really like the storyline. I'm just a bit anxious that what we're presenting would take a lot longer than four hours to shoot.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
Im sure there are places to cut. At this point, I would say let MH take a look, if he has suggestions, I would love for someone else to take a crack at the cuts. But if no one else is willing ill. Try again.
Im sure there are places to cut. At this point, I would say let MH take a look, if he has suggestions, I would love for someone else to take a crack at the cuts. But if no one else is willing ill. Try again.
Looking back at the script HA I think it may look more like the people are talking actions because of the way some of it copied and pasted. I got rid of a lot of the news briefing and and caffi talking shit. U willing to private message me your email so u can take a peakk at the word file?
Another thought, sorry, would it be better if the people who wrote the demasking and the girl/girl sex scene tried to shorten their own stuff? One reason I lefta lot of that in wasi didn't know if some of that dialogue was important or not.
I think the trap we (myself included) have fallen into is to assume we're scripting a TV episode or movie with plenty of rehearsal time and "shot reverse shot" continuity editing with conversations made up from several takes. Looking at previous videos from MH and other producers, that's simply not how these fetish videos work. There's generally a small amount of back and forth dialogue followed by long takes of the villainesses and heroines in action. Even a feature-length Axel Braun "parody" movie at 90+ minutes wouldn't have as much dialogue as we've written for our 20-30 minute custom.
To be honest, I feel we still need to "gut" the script of the majority of dialogue. Maybe have a little talking to set-up the action and then let the performers get down to the more visceral "money shots" we really want to see.
The performers will be more than capable of ad-libbing some generic taunting or pleading during the action itself. Having performers trying to recite some verbose piece of technobabble, pseudoscience or psychobollocks in the middle of the action could kill the scene stone dead, though.
"A brass unicorn has been catapulted across a London street and impaled an eminent surgeon. Words fail me, gentlemen."
Well, MH has a copy of the script now so we'll listen to his advice. I went through and trimmed a little bit more HA, you should have that extra trimming in the copy I sent you. If MH suggests more trimming, would anyone else like to take a crack at it? I think we can go from where we already are, I don't think we have to take the original and trim again. Who knows, maybe MH is willing to just cut out what he feels would be easier at this point. Either way, I just want the script to be done and move on.
One thing to remember, and HA is right about what he said, fetish videos sell fetish, TV and movies sell stories. When we shoot fetish, we have a finite amount of time with the girls. When it comes to TV and movies and even Axel Braun productions, the girls are expected (and paid) to be there till whenever. But they also get called back for "dialogue days" which we don't have the luxury of doing.
Ok enough of my soapbox , I just wanted you to understand why this is important. A perfect example is Heroine Transformations. We basically ran out of time to shoot the good stuff, so I had to improvise and throw everyone on the couch. It wasn't bad, but not what people were expecting.
So it's my job as producer/director to find a balance that works and deliver an excellent video, which this project has the potential to be. It really could be the MOTHER of all customs! haha
So my question now MH is do u want us to trim more, or do u see where u can trim yourself and we have our final draft? I trust your judgment enough to move on if you think we are ready to go. You will hear no complaints from me if there is any dialogue missing from that script you have. As long as the goodies are there, I'm happy. Like I said before, I'm ready for casting and a price so we can decide who contributes what financially.
Thanks for all the feedback everyone, especially HA and MH! Getting very VERY excited!
Dr. Caffi
PS, Name of his custom... I thought we could just go with SUPER (name of actress) Transformed. So if we choose Lexi, just Call it SUPER LEXI TRANSFORMED. Thoughts/Suggestions?
Haven't forgotten. Ive been in coding hell fixing some websites and also had some rentals and finally a few releases coming this weekend. I will be shooting again in May (Next Week) and I plan working this script down either this week or next. I have a possible casting alternative for Supergirl, just trying to make contact.
Sounds great! Who is the supergirl? got pics? I think I remember u saying u had a new sg costume u were working on. Any truth to this or are we looking at the costume thzt ashley rose wore? I was hopin for a less glossy costume if there was something available, if not, not a huge pro lem for me. Also, I would love to see where we are total cost wise, so we can divide it up among contributers and start planning to play accordingly.
The costume I was working on....needs work. The tailor (Seamster?) didn't get the cut right. I know it shouldn't be glossy but it needs to hug the coives as a henchman would say and this one, not so much, BUT! It's just the first go-round ..
Also I have a great idea for the water scene. Is it still in ? We are going to build something special for that since I will be using it for another idea I have for the watergasm site Shhhhh yes, that site is being resurrected
Yes, to me the water scene is the most important in the custom. Who is your supergirl option you spoke about, and do you have a cost estimate for us yet?
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