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Intro:Madame & Madame: A Tribute.

Posted: Fri Aug 07, 2015 12:57 am
by Emperor(Adm.&Gen.)Omar Electo-Magneticus
i apologize for this[/b]

Re: Intro:Madame Nucleo-Blast & Madame America:U.S.Navy & Marine Corps Tribute.

Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2015 8:45 pm
by lordgriffin
Emperor:

I was surprised you wanted my feed back and review, thank you...here's what I see...

All three of your ideas are...well plausible... However the first one, Ebony Williams:

It's clear you like F/F my first question was, if only 1% are men, and used for reproduction, why woudl this powerful being need these 2 as slaves? Feels contrived. And if they are slaves..how do they become heroines? I think you should go with your passion for F/F but you cannot ignore males just because your passion is F/F

I honestly do not know what your suggesting with General Lucifina Kra, she is a plausible character to be sure, though I woudl be careful of descriptions as a "porn star" as Cliche'

Madame NucleoBlast nd Madame America are again cliche' I mean how much more (sorry to sat it) cheap erotica can you get with the huge knockers? Some moderation, make them believable....

Re: Intro:Madame Nucleo-Blast & Madame America:U.S.Navy & Marine Corps Tribute.

Posted: Sun Oct 25, 2015 9:03 pm
by Emperor(Adm.&Gen.)Omar Electo-Magneticus
lordgriffin wrote:Emperor:

I was surprised you wanted my feed back and review, thank you...here's what I see...

All three of your ideas are...well plausible... However the first one, Ebony Williams:

It's clear you like F/F my first question was, if only 1% are men, and used for reproduction, why woudl this powerful being need these 2 as slaves? Feels contrived. And if they are slaves..how do they become heroines? I think you should go with your passion for F/F but you cannot ignore males just because your passion is F/F

I honestly do not know what your suggesting with General Lucifina Kra, she is a plausible character to be sure, though I woudl be careful of descriptions as a "porn star" as Cliche'

Madame NucleoBlast nd Madame America are again cliche' I mean how much more (sorry to sat it) cheap erotica can you get with the huge knockers? Some moderation, make them believable....
Sir Lord,

Thank you so very much for your constructive criticism. Just be mindful that this is a primer comic book story. Though I do have a passion for F/F, I am not actually ignoring the male population; it would destroy the reality. I am building up the story and the superheroines & villainesses in the comic story. Also, Gen. Kra and how she will create these two women into unintended superheroines;and give them their powers, will also be revealed. Again, this is only a primer. I have A LOT OF WORK TO DO WITH THE SINGLE SUPERHEROINE & SUPERVILLAINESS COMIC STORIES THAT I AM WRITING'; LOTS OF WORK; but I also have a life.

Thank you again :evo:


Emperor(Adm.)&(Gen.)Omar Electro-Magneticus.

Re: Intro:Madame Nucleo-Blast & Madame America:U.S.Navy & Marine Corps Tribute.

Posted: Thu Nov 17, 2016 2:41 am
by Emperor(Adm.&Gen.)Omar Electo-Magneticus
Happy Belated Veterans Day to all who served; all branches and the Coast Guard; especially my fellow sailors and marines from my first ship that I served on.